Comments for page "RPC-486"

too long

Thu, 15 Apr 2021 18:23:59 +0000

bad payoff

I hate fox girls!
I hate fox girls!

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Tue, 22 Sep 2020 21:30:59 +0000

It's a decent narrative that's too long and bloated for it's own good. Not enough plot for me. I absolutely hated myself for reading this every single second after the 4000th word.

It also relies too heavily on other articles for it's own good. 2/5.

I dont' know if there's a way to fix this other than "cut half of the narrative out".

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Sat, 19 Sep 2020 19:16:38 +0000

It's a fun read, but it relies on one other equally long article and two tales for a full effect.
The humor is good, but it is cut up in an episodic way, more of a collection of anecdotes than a full comedy show.

Good work, and it was fun helping you along the way. 3/5

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Fri, 18 Sep 2020 14:47:13 +0000

Many thanks to Togetic and Gismo for helping with the crit.

Thread here: http://www.rpc-wiki.net/forum/t-13705395/rpc:morose-trickster

The tale relevant to the update at the bottom is still awaiting crit here: http://www.rpc-wiki.net/forum/t-13713368/a-trip-to-tokyo

UPDATE (1st June) - Overhauled and tidied up the article and moved a lot of junk into an offshoot. http://rpcauthority.wikidot.com/486-security-files