People like you deserve summary execution.

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So touching it will harm you, but touching it with the roof of your mouth won't? This is very illogical, you can't ingest something without it touching the walls of your insides. It would be needless and ridiculous for it to cause harm when it touches your epidermal structure, but not when it touches parts of the body that are closer to the regions that would endure complications in the substance's presence.

This article suffers heavily from ellipses abuse. The sheer amount of them ruins the article's dialogue entries and makes the r/wholesome part of it extremely forced and cringe.

On top of this, the Authority's prime mission is to contain anomalies. They are not stupid. They know that throwing a literal child with blatant emotional/mental issues and PTSD into an isolation box is going to definitely turn him into monster mode. Not good for containment. Yes, this article uses that as plot device to drive the relationship arc between Bertold and Timmy, but it is entirely based on needlessly cruel and senseless methodology that the Authority is established not to uphold.

You use a metric fuckton of footnotes that could easily, due to the fact that you have 22 footnotes, include in the actual itself.

Finally, the article states a number of anomalous qualities that do not represent anything important within the actual article, evidenced by its removal resulting in no change to the development of the story, or narrative profile of the article. For example:

The mouth was noted to be capable of absorbing essential nutrients and "energy" of a sentient or sapient subject. However this effect is largely unexplored, as previous testing has resulted in the subject affected by RPC-695-1 effects to experience near-death.

In conclusion, this article is poorly written, however, I did find this funny:

CSD-1375: Fear/Dread (Correct)

1 star.

P.S. The kid in the second picture is so fucking adorable.

tl;dr I've only read two of your articles, that being this and the sub vesuvia whale. But even between those two, this is a substantial improvement. It's not without it's grammatical issues, but from what I can tell English is your second language anyway, but even with those minor issues I don't see any reason not to give it a five. My only complaint is that more research into RPC-695's "chupacabra" form would've been nice, all I could gather from the article is that it's diet and emotional state if kept in check can keep 695 from turning into this fleshy shamble of a monster. But overall, this is how you do a "le scary monster" article as you both had the scary monster but also had much more substance outside of "woah, pretty cool monster!" to keep the RPC grounded.

One more thing. Project 107 was not adequately foreshadowed in my opinion, and it just "shows up" for no good reason. Too much external context needed for it to work.

I suggest showing what it is, maybe brief mentions of it before the final reveal? The article works fine without it, and if it's trying to be a twist then there needs to be more "flavour" to it.

2 now.

695's vast array of powers and abilities doesn't contribute to the article's narrative, puts unnecessary weight on the description, and isn't even directly relevant to any other part of the article save for the test logs, which read like filler and aren't interesting anyways. You could've done something interesting with them and use them to describe Timmy's relationship with his powers, but in their current state they can be skipped without any loss to the article. All you'really need to have is one or two "abilities" and 695-2 as a drawback or unpredictable power to balance them out (of course you'd need to find a way to differentiate Timmy from the Incredible Hulk), and you'd have a decent dynamic going on that could work well with Project 107.

I'm not sure if I missed it, but 695 isn't even described anywhere in the article. This is awkward because it's referenced extensively.

While I get why the last addendum is there, post-credits scene where Iron Man is introduced to the Avengers initiative and all, it just doesn't feel connected to the rest of the article. Everything before this collapsible tells us that Timmy is horrified by his powers and feels like a monster because of them, and I'm supposed to believe that having an adult suddenly tell him he's a good boy suddenly made him change his mind and choose to be a superhero and use his powers for good. It just doesn't work.

This issue could be reduced by having these last two addendums separated by a significant amount of time, a few years at least, so one could fill in the gaps and realize there hasn't been any more 695-2 incidents and that Timmy has had plenty of time to develop and come to terms with himself. The best solution would be having some sort of addendum where we're indirectly told that Dr. Bertold and 695 have been deepening their father-son relationship in some way and that this has had positive effects, and that he's as a result either more in control of his powers, or has managed to partially suppress -2.

The article has significant SPAG issues that hugely detract from the general experience and make me unable to take it seriously or feel more attached to 695 and Bertold as characters. Descriptions in the interview feel especially stilted, and just ruin the entire thing for me. It worries me that none of your many, many critters took the time to help you correct them, or at least pointed out that the article just wasn't ready to be posted.

With all that said, I'll rate this article a 2. It has a lot of potential to be an amazing character piece, but SPAG and superhero tropes drag it down a lot. I can't promise that I'll be able to help much with improving it because of time constraints, but I suggest you ask someone native in English for help specifically with SPAG.