Comments for page "Horsepower"

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Thu, 10 Dec 2020 05:18:18 +0000

Hey Greekspy,

I know I'm late as fuck to this review but I do like your article, a lot.

I hope you come back one day, I'd love to sit down with you and go through on improving it further.

(no title)

Tue, 13 Oct 2020 03:23:16 +0000

Source for the file I've localized;

https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/2/2f/Army_veterans_inspect_a_M1_Combat_Car_at_the_1939_World%27s_Fair_in_New_York_City.jpg

(no title)

Tue, 26 May 2020 08:05:36 +0000

Please do elaborate on the grammar or spelling errors that may exist as I had quite a few people proofread it as to avoid that. As stated before, the trope and concept is as such due to the limitations given.

Re: Overdone Idea

Tue, 26 May 2020 08:01:56 +0000

Could you tell me where those errors are? Because I had quite a few people go over it for that purpose alone and after the 3rd or 4th person, it appeared to not have any mistakes left.
As stated before, the concept is as such due to limitations by the materials given.

(no title)

Mon, 25 May 2020 23:53:11 +0000

Proofreading needs to happen, and the item in question is a little exhausting. I hate to echo what others have said, but this trope of old machines still fighting a war is a pain.

The pacing of the article was pretty good, with some decent shine-throughs of clinical tone sprinkled here and there, but I just wish it was used on literally anything else that wasn't this trope.

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Overdone Idea

Mon, 25 May 2020 22:59:38 +0000

Over the years "Sentient war machine thats still fighting its war" type articles pop up almost routineley. For some reason its almost always a tank. Additionally, I have found several spelling and grammar errors, this really requires more proof reading.

(no title)

Mon, 25 May 2020 12:03:47 +0000

The clinical tone and pacing are on point. I’d say the execution is great. It’s just not super interesting. It doesn’t go into much depth, staying pretty surface level to the concept throughout the whole thing. The test log was redundant with information already stated, so it added nothing to the article. Overall I did enjoy it enough to upvote.

(no title)

Thu, 21 May 2020 05:28:15 +0000

Aye, I was informed on the matter but it kinda pushed towards such a concept due to the limitations of the hazards and the image given. Thats why I tried to give a bit more depth/tragedy to the concept. But it was more of an item of circumstances.

(no title)

Thu, 21 May 2020 01:32:46 +0000

This isn't badly written, or anything, but conceptually the whole "possessed/living war machine still fighting old battles" thing has been done to death.

(no title)

Wed, 20 May 2020 06:41:08 +0000

http://www.rpc-wiki.net/forum/t-13317483/trh-contest-entry-horsepower

This entry to the TRH contest also takes part into the Special Random Image Challenge.

Given Hazards: Emotional Hazard, Mechanical Hazard, Regenerative Hazard.

Thanks to everyone who assisted me throughout the process.