Comments for page "RPC-187"

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Fri, 11 Aug 2023 03:18:27 +0000

The tone, pacing, interviews, and overall execution are all nicely done. However I just don't get what the Swiss Habsburgs are supposed to be all about and what connection they have to Earhart. It just feels like a completely random inclusion. Apparently they send weird recruitment letters to some order and have some kind of hellscape I guess? Even after looking it up I still can't seem to figure it out. I don't know if this is a GoI being introduced here or not, but either way, I think switching it with something else more recognizable and related to Earhart's disappearance and theories would help make this article's idea much better.

Good execution, but concepts and ideas could use switching around. 3 stars.

Agent ██████: I think I'm going to have to bring you in for custody.

Man, why do I find this sudden interruption at the end of the first interview log so funny lmao.

Re: If I'm Dreaming My Life

Fri, 10 May 2019 21:39:11 +0000

:GG: Mate, this is an awesome piece! You've done some epic writing, congrats on those five medals!

(no title)

Fri, 10 May 2019 21:36:56 +0000

Superb narrative and very pleasing prose.

(no title)

Wed, 08 May 2019 18:18:22 +0000

I agree. Might have been much better if that part was a separate interview.

To be honest, the whole first interview should have been separated into more than three parts. Way too much information went back and forth while the agent and Ms. Earhart just met like 3 minutes before. Simply it might not make sense.

Also, I think changing Interview-187-A-1 to Addendum-1 or something like that would make the article more professional. Designations should remain consistent.

Overall, the concept was good, and there is a definite potential for this to become a decent storytelling rpc, but for now the plot and its development is a bit awkward.

2/5. I'm sorry.

(no title)

Thu, 25 Apr 2019 18:07:42 +0000

This is a very well done piece I must say. For a neutralized RPC, it capitalizes off of the mystery and thriller aspect in what is a conspiracy piece. Lovely set up and execution.

(no title)

Sat, 20 Apr 2019 21:14:51 +0000

Pretty good for the most part. One problem I have is how the Agent was able to conclude she was trapped in a radio. Seems like a bit of a jump.

(no title)

Wed, 10 Apr 2019 16:16:29 +0000

I'm a little interested in writing for the Habsburgs now.
hmmm

(no title)

Fri, 22 Mar 2019 22:44:34 +0000

Poor Miss Earhart!
Nice job on your first RPC!

If I'm Dreaming My Life

Fri, 22 Mar 2019 18:11:35 +0000

This is my first RPC!

Many thanks to Hyze, Enkrum, and The_great_tarbolin, who provided critique.

Enjoy!

EDIT: obligatory lyricpost to match the title
https://youtu.be/LxOd-TnOS6c

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