Comments for page "Working Unpaid Overtime"

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Mon, 25 Mar 2019 19:11:18 +0000

A nice story, but in my opinion it has way too many mistakes considering how short it is. Sentences as broken as " All he knew it was these delusions stayed inside his cubicle and didn't accompany him back home. As this multitude of questions started pillaging his mind, he heard a knock on the door." really detract from the enjoyment of this short horror story, and mind you, it /would/ be a very good short horror story if it weren't for these sorts of errors. Congratulations on your first tale ever, but I do hope you go back and edit it a bit.

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Thu, 21 Mar 2019 01:41:42 +0000

Middle Management is one of my favorite RPCs.
I personally think this tale does it justice, it doesn't drag out too long and captures the vividly anxiety that its victims would be forced to suffer through. +5

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Thu, 07 Mar 2019 21:49:39 +0000

I've already made this comment before in the drafts but its still appropriate to point out the parts that really sold this piece well. It had a nice mixture of morbid humor added upon the tension that we see through the eyes of a white collar office worker and the relentless middle management. There are still a couple vocabulary issues that needed work but it didn't take away from the experience.

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Thu, 07 Mar 2019 19:20:56 +0000

Nice job on your fist one! A good addition to 067's narrative.

067 tale

Thu, 07 Mar 2019 06:06:11 +0000

first ever thing published here. Thanks to SticksNTricks and moist bread for the reviews.
Sandbox here: http://rpcsandbox.wikidot.com/067-tale-imnoteric
Crit here: http://www.rpc-wiki.net/forum/t-10533448/067-tale